To sit motionless
in the land
so seemingly unclutter-less
and crying like a bee
that got no honey to shed tears
whilst attempting to grow
into a bigger puzzle-
in the un-opaqe-ish mode-
you sigh, you try, get dry.
Being transparent can make you colourless!
I think this is some really good lyrics for a rap song. I think you should set it to tune and release your single on the net. In a dry run i did in my mind I think the penultimate line is where the money is and you may have to modify the last line to rythm. :-)
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ReplyDeleteYour Humour venky,
gives me a tumour venky,
flunky venky flunky venky....
yeah! flunky venky flunky venky! :D
Not bad but to me it sounds more like pop. The flunky venky bit would make for a nice chorus.
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